Showing posts with label Post 20: The shadow domain.. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Post 20: The shadow domain.. Show all posts

Thursday, May 26, 2011

Week 20 wrap-up

Okay, so week 20's prompt was:

I find myself drawn to the shadow domain

and here's what I read:

  • Winter wrote our Friday feature about a) guys playing a video game & pretty much dying from starvation or b) guys in a futuristic setting whose jobs are actually to ...umm... be in the video game. Yeah, still don't quite know which. hehe
  • Jes contributed a story that was our Sunday story pick, about a girl just minding her own beeswax when a veritable "Thor" dude shows up in dire need of hops. hehe. They head off to outer space, and the local religious folks take it as a sign that Armageddon is nigh. Gotta love it!
  • Michael brought us what I saw as something of a "Princess Caitlin best of" in which Caitlin fought off deadly poisons and the showdown between her and Evil Susan began... dun dun dun, what will happen next?!?!
  • Madeline seemed to bend reality with her story this week (or maybe it's just that my brain isn't bendy enough to follow...hehe); this story certainly had an eerie/mysterious feel to it. Love her writing style as usual!
  • Brooke's beautiful piece for this week reminded me of that dream-dance in The Labyrinth between Jareth and Sarah - and like Sarah, Brooke's heroine this time was awoken rudely from the dream...only to hear the echo of her hero's voice and his promise that he isn't far
  • Jenn wrote about Cinderella and the Devil and lung cancer that shows on your skin - a short story that kept me hooked from start to finish, made me giggle and gape by turns, etc.
  • And I wrote about a bitchy snooty lady woman who awakens (unexpectedly - most people secretly hoped she would die) to find that her hubby has betrayed her and that nothing is as it was before.

Sunday, May 22, 2011

Trisha's story pick, Week 20

First off, I want to say sorry for being a slacker with story commenting lately. I've slacked off in all areas, not just this one! Doesn't mean I don't want to read your stories. :P

Secondly, this week I had another struggle with choosing stories, but given the weekend we just had (where the world didn't end), I really had no choice but to choose Jes's story. It gave me a nice giggle or two and hell I probably would've gone with that dude too. He reminded me of the 2011 version of Thor, incidentally. LOL.


The Eve of the End
Almost everyone in town called it the ice cream truck of death. It turned onto Main from a side street and headed towards Marjorie’s house. The truck was owned and operated by the local holy rollers; they also did the skating rink outside of town. Alongside the freshly painted warnings of the End Times and quotes of scriptures were the pictures of orangesicles and peanut-covered drumsticks. Tonight, the dusk air was heavy with the possibility of rain, but comfortable, and exoskeletons of the 17-year cicadas made the walk from the screen door to the porch swing set a crunchy one, so she'd taken to tiptoeing. Marjorie sat comfortably in the swing, beer in hand, watching the sun set over the top of Mrs. Ritchie’s house across the street, sharing her swing with one of the sweet-tempered red eyed bugs and her guitar.
It was the time of evening when her friends would stop by for a visit, since there wasn’t anything else to do. Have a beer, catch up. Sometimes she wished there was more “happening” to her, to Centerville, but the evening was nice and she wasn’t going to let herself be annoyed by a lifestyle she hadn’t the wherewithal to change. Marjorie picked up her guitar and strummed a G to match the ice cream music, eyeing the truck. It looked like it was slowing down.
It was. The ice cream truck of death pulled to a stop in front of Marjorie’s sidewalk, it’s happy-go-lucky music a determined drone. The driver’s side door slammed. Around the front of the truck staggered the best looking man Marjorie had ever seen on the face of the Earth. He was dashing. He was virile. He was sex and romance and maniliness in human form.
And he walked like he was drunk or something.

Friday, May 20, 2011

Hooked Up

((Caution... this is super-weird/speculative stuff. Also, this is my Official Language Warning. F-bombs are dropped.))

“Dude, that’s fuckin’ radical,” Scott laughed.

I nodded. “Yeah, bro, I know. I totally leveled up, right in front of her—it was wicked.” I frowned. “Then again, though, she had that look on her face.”

“What look?” Scott threw himself into my dish chair with a yawn, flicking on his headset. The screen flickered into existence over his eyes.

“The not-impressed look. Yo, turn that off. I’m tryin’ to talk to you.”

Scott rolled his eyes, but he turned the headset off. “Sorry, Mom.”

I narrowed my eyes at him. “Okay. So like I was saying. I was at the top of the Temple with the Grey Sky, and I saw this Crawler sneaking up the side of the rock to get Iris, so I engaged. And we fought for ages, man. Ages, I’m serious. And turns out the Crawler was some high-point scorer, so I leveled up.”

“Sweet. So, wait, why would she not be impressed by that? Sounds awesome.”

“Yeah, it was awesome,” I muttered, but I felt like I was trying to convince myself. No matter what I did for Iris, she always looked at me like I was something she’d just equalized with her hovermotor.

“You wanna try finding her? Talking to her?” Scott tapped his headset, grinning. “Come on. You know you want to. And she just saw you looking like a total boss. You’ll get Kudos for that at Assembly, no problem.”

I looked out the window at the graying sky. “I know. The honors alone are worth it, probably. And shit, it drained half my life, so it better be worth it.”

“Half? Damn, boy, we better go find you some replenishment.”

“Naw, man, that shit costs so much. My half-full life is probably still better than most people’s full lives.”

Scott leaned back in my dish chair, staring at the slow-moving ceiling fan. It moved sluggishly, like it was slicing through something with every turn. Thwap. Thwap. Thwap. “Okay, dude, if you’re just gonna fuckin' sit here and whine, I’m clocking in.”

“No, fuck it, wait, I’ll clock in too.” I reached for the headset on my glass desk and shoved it on. The familiar scarred cushioning lent me a sense of relief, in a strange way. I spent so much time clocked in these days that it almost felt unnatural to be unplugged.

I flicked a switch on the headset. The screen buzzed into place, the frequency crackling. Then I jabbed a fat black button, and two spindly needles slid into my skull just in front of my ears.

My whole body went slack.

When I opened my eyes, I held a serrated hunting knife. Scott stood across from me, black-haired and blue-eyed, a cocky grin on his face as usual.

“Plateau,” I observed, checking our surroundings.

“Yeah. Let’s get to Center.”

“Center? It’ll be crawling with…”

Scott smirked. “Crawlers?”

“That.”

“Chill, Madison.”

“I’m chill. I just don’t think Center’s a good idea this time of day. And Iris isn’t gonna be there. She’s probably in Politick.”

Scott made a face. “Forget that.”

“How about a quest?”

“Assigned by Politick? Fuck, no.”

I sighed. “I just meant any quest. What’ve you got against Politick, anyway?”

He shrugged. “In real life, people couldn’t get away with being as arrogant as they act in Politick.”

I rolled my eyes. That’s why this isn’t real life, Scott. But I didn’t say that.

“Well,” he said, “I guess we can stop by just to see if Iris is there. But you owe me.” He punched me. “Also, I wanna see where you took out the Crawler. Temple with the Grey Sky, right?”

“Yeah.” We hurried over Plateau, the granite lighting up under our feet, veins of minerals twisting and curling in sudden light. The sky was dark—it always was in the Other Plane, but it was especially so since my life bar was half-empty. And my legs were annoyingly sluggish because of it. Made me consider, for a moment, unplugging to purchase more. But I’d sold enough of my stuff for the Other Plane—my brothers said if I started selling my possessions again, they’d take my headset, and that wasn’t going to happen. I had a whole life here.

We came to a compass disk, and as we stepped into it, a lashing wind dissipated our shadow-bodies, reassimilating them in Politick.

Politick was less dreary-looking than Plateau. People never hung around Plateau for long—it was barren, save for rogue quest materials, and you could come across some pretty nasty stuff there.

“Iris,” called Scott into the air.

I elbowed him. “What are you doing?”

“Someone call?” said her voice, and then the mist streamed into a head, torso, and long sleek legs. Iris Parker.

“Sorry. My mistake,” said Scott.

Iris shot him that disgusted look. It almost made me happy that she didn’t keep that look especially for me. As she glanced over and saw me, her eyes filled with recognition. “Good job earlier,” she said. “I’ll congratulate you in person when I see you at Assembly.”

“Really?” I blurted, and then I sort of wanted to die. If these bodies could blush, my face would have been splotchy red right then. As it was, I wished I could dissipate on command, like the Talkers. But no. I needed a compass disk.

Iris was a Talker. Not unsurprising, given…well, given Iris, but it meant my chances with her were slim to none. Talkers and Fliers? Not typically a good match.

“Sure,” she said. “I’ll vote for your Kudos, too.”

I was going to fall over for sure. I’d gotten respect points for sensing the Crawler, apparently. “Thanks,” I managed to say.

Scott wasn’t doing anything dumb, for a change. I seriously appreciated it. My first legitimate conversation with Iris Parker didn’t need ruination.

She held up a finger. “Okay, well, that was a lie, sorry. I’ll vote for you on one condition.”

“Yeah?” It wasn’t about the vote. It was about her approval.

“Quest for a Silencer.”

I stared. “Why…why do you need a…” It was like asking for a pike, or a cannon, only eight hundred times worse. Silencers could cancel Talkers entirely—or so rumor had it. No one knew what they even were—what they looked like; how they worked.

“Try?”

“I mean, I’ll try,” I said.

I could practically hear Scott’s voice in my mind. Whipped, bro. But he looked sort of worried, to be honest.

Iris smiled, waved, and dissipated.

Me and Scott said, in unison, “Detach.” The Other Plane detached us from the server automatically.

The Quest wasn’t a Quest, really. It was an obsession. Even after I got my Kudos and bought a new hovermotor—even after the entire Assembly thanked me for wiping an experienced Crawler from the system—I wasn’t happy.

I clocked in every day after work. Scott stopped tagging along on my journeys soon enough. I dug down through Plateau; I explored every temple in Ruins; I scoured every tree in Wild; I mined every tunnel in Burrow; I explored every alley in Politick and I searched every house in Center.

“This isn’t healthy,” Scott said.

“Yeah, man, you’re probably right. Wanna come with me?”

And eventually he stopped saying yes.

Eventually I stopped finding any Quest partners at all. And I spent so much time plugged in that I’d skip meals.

One day I was searching a sub-basement of Politick when my life bar beeped. There had to be a mistake, or something—I hadn’t even started a fight since the Crawler. How was my life low?

“Detach,” I tried to say, but it came out as a croak. How long had it been since I’d drunk anything?

“Detach,” I tried again, but my voice snapped and broke.

“Iris?” I whispered. It was enough for the call. She materialized.

“Hello, Madison.”

“Help me.” My voice died completely. Quietness rang in the stone sub-basement.

She smiled a little. “So you found a Silencer.”

“I did?” I mouthed.

Iris’s lips tightened into a grim smile. “You are one.”

She said my name, and I dissipated along with her.

Monday, May 16, 2011

PROMPT NUMBER TWENTY

Oooh, it's nearly the Chrysalis Experiment's 21st! :D For now though, just boring 20th... lol

Write a 1000-10,000 word prose (or 333-3,300 word verse) story based on the following:

I find myself drawn to the shadow domain

Fun times!